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1. Write an intro about Obesity history before the sentences below.
(Start here)Obesity has become number one issue worldwide.Obesity is the reason behind a lot of serious diseases such as heart diseases, vascular diseases, depression and cancer. To lose weight people can work on themselves by eating healthy food, exercising everyday, using surgeries and medicine. Surgeries and medicine can help to lose weight, but it could also have negative effects to human body. There are many key strategies for an obese person to lose weight.
What I want you to do:
1. Change the quote and add another one from the article (Different Form of obesity as a function of diet composition) and the quote should be related to thetopic sentence 1 and the Introduce to the quote.
2. Paraphrase the quote with your own words in paraphrase about the quote.
3. In the experience part write more. In each experience part there should be a one concluding sentence, which is the last sentence, and you must use Therefore.
Topic sentence 1:Eating healthy food will be the first strategy to lose weight.
Introduce to the quote:Diet has become the first and important step to start losing weight and preventing obesity.
Quote:According to Leibowitz, in his article, "Diet composition appears to be an important factor in revealing physiological processes that are abnormally regulated in obesity."Delete this and change it with another quote that is related to topic sentence 1.
Paraphrase about the quote:Diet is the first factor to help you know your body and what is happening inside before doing any other step.
Learning about your body will help you lose weight faster.Delete this and paraphrase the quote that you have already choose from the article.
Experience part: When Icame to the U.S I decided to start a diet program after noticing that I have gained some weight. The reason behind that is eating fast food instead of health food. Therefore, eating healthy food with a good diet program it will be conducive to lose weight towards healthy life.
What I want you to do:
1. Change the quote and add another one from the article (Dieting, weight & exercise Finding a healthy balance) and the quote should be related to thetopic sentence 2 and the Introduce to the quote.
2. Paraphrase the quote with your own words in paraphrase about the quote.
3. In the experience part write more. In each experience part there should be a one concluding sentence, which is the last sentence, and you must use Therefore.
Topic sentence 2:Daily exercise is very useful way to lose weight.
Introduce to the quote:Exercising everyday for one or two hours would help to lose weight faster.
Quote:Clark claims, in her article, "The more you exercise, the more likely you are to compensate with reduced activity the rest of the day."Delete this and change it with another quote that is related to topic sentence 2.
Paraphrase about the quote:To requite the rest of our day, start to work harder than the day before.Delete this and paraphrase the quote that you have already choose from the article.
Experience part: I usually do exercise for 15 minutes per day to make my body in the same weight. Therefore, exercising is the most helpful way for the body to be in a good andBeautiful shape.
What I want you to do:
1. In the experience part write more, like how much did the cousins lost and how long it took them too (write from your imagination, does not have to be true). In each experience part there should be a one concluding sentence, which is the last sentence, and you must use Therefore.
Topic sentence 3:Losing weight by surgeries is one of the waysthat people can do.
Introduce to the quote:Surgeries in these days become conducive to lose weight.
Quote:Karmali says, "Bariatric surgery for the severely obese has resulted in an overall 61% weight reduction across all procedures and has been shown to eliminate or significantly ameliorate many of the obesity related comorbidities."
Paraphrase about the quote:Choosing to lose weight by surgeries is a life changing choicebecause it could reduce more than 50% of the body fat to lose weight.
Experience part: Two of my cousin'sdid gastric banding surgery and both of the surgeries were successful and the results are remarkable. Therefore, some surgeries might be expensive, but it's one goodstrategy to lose weight faster.
What I want you to do:
1. Write theexperience part. In each experience part there should be a one concluding sentence, which is the last sentence, and you must use Therefore.
2. Rewrite the Introduce to the quotebecause it's not good enough.
3. Rewrite the Paraphrase about the quotebecause its not goodenough tooand Google the word placebo and know more about it so it will help you writing this part.
Topic sentence 4:Another strategy to help you lose weight is by drug medicines.
Introduce to the quote:Drug medicine is used prior to a doctor's prescription.
Quote:According to Alice, in her article, "The only injectable weight loss drug approved by the Food and Drug Administration helps people to lose more than 12 pounds, more than twice as much as people taking a placebo."
Paraphrase about the quote:(change this)Using medicine will let people lose more than 12 pounds and more than the people who are using other kinds of medicines because drug executive approves drug medicine.
Experience part: (write it here)
What I want you to do:
1. You should write this paragraph. All of it and it will be about Fasting. Write the topic sentence 5, Introduce to the quote, quote from the article(Islamic fasting and weight loss: a systematic review and mata-analysis), paraphrase about the quote and finally the experience part.Note: In each experience part there should be a one concluding sentence, which is the last sentence, and you must use Therefore.
Topic sentence 5:
Introduce to the quote:
Quote:
Paraphrase about the quote:
Experience part: (don't forget to use in the last sentence the word Therefore.)
What I want you to do:
1. just write an advice or a suggestion at the end of this paragraph.
In conclusion, obesity these days is a major problem around the world and unless this issue is solved, a lot of people will suffer from diseases and eventually die. People can lose weight by eating healthy food, exercising, doing surgeries or start taking a medicine. These are the strategies that an obese person can use to lose weight and start a new life.